FORMAL OUTLINE
Preliminary Thesis: A leaner and a rock makes a better man
I. 1st supporting point: Metropolitan look of the clothes appeals to masculinity
A. classic but urbanely combined appearance
1.pose of confidence with hands pocketed
2.projecting attention with opened coat buttons with an inner yellow sweater
B.Urban men have a use for odd color combination of clothes than those in the country.
1.Professionalism
2.Any type of man can put on these vintage classic fits of clothes provided they can afford
II. 2nd supporting point: Soft and pensive appearance.
A.Clean shave and introspective look
1.Retro and rock touch concealed in facial
2.The next guy's eyes are cut off exhibiting secrecy.
B.men are expected to portray a strict,upright and trusting discipline.
III. 3rd supporting point: The new professionalism which combines both a retro,leaner and urban attitude.
A. professional men of today make it a point to stay physically fit.
1.consideration of the dress code and the facials combined introduces a new era of conventional retro.
B.conclusion of add comes within the brand name and it's history of patronage from both blue and white collared men.
Preliminary Thesis: A leaner and a rock makes a better man
I. 1st supporting point: Metropolitan look of the clothes appeals to masculinity
A. classic but urbanely combined appearance
1.pose of confidence with hands pocketed
2.projecting attention with opened coat buttons with an inner yellow sweater
B.Urban men have a use for odd color combination of clothes than those in the country.
1.Professionalism
2.Any type of man can put on these vintage classic fits of clothes provided they can afford
II. 2nd supporting point: Soft and pensive appearance.
A.Clean shave and introspective look
1.Retro and rock touch concealed in facial
2.The next guy's eyes are cut off exhibiting secrecy.
B.men are expected to portray a strict,upright and trusting discipline.
III. 3rd supporting point: The new professionalism which combines both a retro,leaner and urban attitude.
A. professional men of today make it a point to stay physically fit.
1.consideration of the dress code and the facials combined introduces a new era of conventional retro.
B.conclusion of add comes within the brand name and it's history of patronage from both blue and white collared men.
Your thesis needs some work but it is a good start. Think about why the combination of a ‘rock’ and ‘leaner’ is a more effective reflection of masculinity and what TYPE of masculinity is it?
ReplyDeleteThe first supporting point focuses on analysis of the clothing in the ad and how these ‘urbane country’ pieces of clothing reflect masculinity. Remember that in your analysis- in your paper- you need to explain how these clothes reflect the TYPE of masculinity you see this ad advertising. Then your second point deals with the facial expressions and the models’ groomed look. I like your observation here, as you suggest the men have a ‘softer,’ approachable ‘rock’ confidence. Am I on the right track? But your third point of support is a bit confusing as it seems to repeat what you have said in the previous paragraphs? Remember that the third point is NOT your conclusion. Also I’m not sure what you mean “by retro, leaner and urban attitude”? Is retro, leaner one image or two images, retro and leaner? You didn’t explain the leaner attitude or the retro attitude? Good start.